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"When it comes to string theory, language is merely poetry; i.e. it describes daydreams and fake images that don't have anything to do with the real world of undeniable facts."
(yours truly: the Abercrombie)
(…) covered in snowfall,
and there is scarce daylight.
Early commuters are already leaving for the trains
while cold air steadily enters via the
margins of darkish
windows of the affluent room.
They shudder under the quilt
and last night's dead meat asks
them whether they are desolated or not.
Nothing.
One of them snores.
Finally, somebody awakens and quickly leaves
for the bathroom,
still feeling sick.
The toilet flushes one time and then again
and the pipes laughs sharply.
© Anders Enochsson


17 Reflections:
Den blev tusen gånger bättre nu och mer mystisk, alltså mer poetisk. Enligt mig.
Det är värt att påpeka det längst upp, Abercrombies utsago.
Tack. Och din
nya bild liknar en oljemålning. Snygg.
...The pipe would have what we'd call a "hollow laugh", then.
Hej,
Citerar du dig själv nu? Herregud. Hang-up på toaletter. Fan. Nu ska jag gå dit själv. Systemet stängde för 50 minuter sen. Skit.
ok , i give my arm to be twisted for this ... now : nightmare .
i mean it
Very nice. I must admit that I think the first version you posted here is the better one. But both contain vivd emotions.
Hey there, I like the way you've captured the 'the morning after' feel, and the pace of it makes it really easy to read.
And that's an interesting quote above, who is "the Abercrombie", if you don't mind my asking?
Artsparker - Yes indeed.
Jukka - Associations.
Caio - Thanks.
Gray - Its a matter of taste.
The Scrybe - Yes, its easy to take a glass to many.
Yours truly; Ande
Hahah .. I liked this one.
Haven't read the part 1. Will do so.
Still grappling with The Rainbow.
Ande... Your poem made me smile and I liked it very much. It made me think of those cold winter mornings, when you don't want to get up early for work...You certainly don't want to get out of bed, if you had a heavy night drinking!
I hate feeling hungover the next day, after a drinking session. I tend not to do that, too often these days!;)
I like your new title with the Zeppelin ship.;)
Jo.
Jo,
Drinking is good for the soul, I'm sure of that. However its not good for the brain always. I'm glad you liked the Zeppelin. It's from early 1900. I love this time; something was in the air which made the time so full of different artists and people (1874-1918 and the 20s). So much could have happened; white Zeppelins ruled the sky. Instead there was a couple of world wars. So the century became at least a grounded but much "magic" disappeared. I think the world could have looked very different than today if the sprit of pre world wars would have continued. They say the same thing about the sixties.
Jag ahr inte druckit vin på flera dagar för jag ahr inga stålar. Hyve. Jag blir galen av törst efter vin. I morron blir det fest.
Hi,
I liked this too. Can't think of anyone sleeping under a quilt, though.
I liked this. It may sound flippant, but -apart from the famous episode in Ulysses- it's not often people go to the lavatory in poetry, literature or drama. Fictional/poetical people seem not to need to.
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Ande,
Great poem. It's certainly healthy to have a real hangover. Until the dead end of alcoholism, it seems like "functioning" drunks wake up full of energy and a desire for breakfast. There is something comforting about a person who experiences alcohol as a toxin not to be meddled with.
This poem reminded me of a Merle Haggard line, "Morning, blue shadows, cross a room with clothes scattered, and a bed, two bodies entwined. The one's that's he's lied to, aren't the one's that he's tied to, and his own family, seldom crosses his mind." From: Love Makes a Fool Of Us All.
I love your poetry, Ande.
Thanks.
Thank you, Andy!
I whish I had some more time writing poetry sometimes. At least now I am sitting with a glass of red wine in my hand and can finally answer your comment. I have never read Haggard, but it was a fine poem. You are so right about alcohol. We need the alcohol to have the energy to keep going. I need it certainly. It fast as hell replaced candy when I grew up. Strange phenomena, time. I remember the "not long ago" as bright days full of hills, some people and, well wine. Now all my days are full of offices, darkness (literary) and, well, wine.
Dominic - Well, I have always percived toilets to be an essential ingridient of poetry and life.
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