torsdag 15 oktober 2009

Sausage Snow (updated)


(…) covered in snowfall,
and there is scarce daylight.
Early commuters are already leaving for the trains
while cold air steadily enters via the
margins of darkish
windows of the affluent room.
They shiver under the quilt
and last night's dead meat asks
them wheter they are desolated or not.
Nothing.
One of them snores.

Finally, somebody awakens and quickly leaves
for the bathroom,
still feeling sick.

The toilet flushes one time and then again
and the pipes laugh sharply.


© Anders Enochsson 2009




12 Reflections:

ArtSparker sa...

Sounds like a monday morning, with the rawness of everything.

Jenny sa...

Skulle aldrig kunna klämma i mig sådant till frukost ens om jag hade varit köttätare. Blääää....

Riktigt bra dikt med flyt i. Men när man tittar på den där flottiga bilden känns ordet flyt fel. Rinner obehindrat kan man inte heller säga utan att associera till bilden. Äh, du fattar... Bra puls.

...Gray... sa...

Very good imagery. You can capture emotion so well with your writing. I really liked this one. So univeral to almost every part of the planet.

Jukka sa...

Hej,

Fan jag tror jag ska steka en förpackning bacon. Styrbjörn är ett jäkligt snyggt namn tycker jag.

Bra dikt. Jag skulle aldrig ha på mig trasiga kalsonger. Aldrig. Inte ens om nån försökte tvinga mig till det. Med pistolen mot tinningen.

Andy Coffey sa...

Ande,

Fascinating imagery. It sounds simultaneously like a kitchen, in the morning, with a interloping, naughty child, and a train station.
It's funny, and dramatic, but I don't know just how.
How could that be? I, again, don't know.

Caio Fernandes sa...
Det här inlägget har tagits bort av den som skapade det.
Caio Fernandes sa...

what a paradise !!
i meant it

Ande sa...

ArtSparker - Yes Monday morning is usually not my favorite scene.

Jenny - Ja men ändrade nu. Kött blääää

Gray - Thank you. It's nice to hear that people from other pats of the world can relate to my poetry.


Jukka - Jag vet att du inne skulle det.

Andy - I didn't feel this poem was finished so I re wrote it. Perhaps this mysterious feeling came from this fact.

Caio - Thank you.

Jasmine sa...

Reminds me of London. It seems the days around the winter equinox, one scrambles out of bed blearily trying to wake before the commuter hell of the tube. Thankfully I don't have to do that any more...

Ande sa...

Oh, London is full of impression.

Marie sa...

Dear Ande,

An astonishing piece. You
create isolation among others
so well. I admire you economy
of language.


Marie

Ande sa...

Hi Mari,

Thank you. Your blog is a marvel of economy of language.