(…) covered in snowfall,
and there is scarce daylight.
Early commuters are already leaving for the trains
while cold air steadily enters via the
margins of darkish
windows of the affluent room.
They shiver under the quilt
and last night's dead meat asks
them wheter they are desolated or not.
Nothing.
One of them snores.
Finally, somebody awakens and quickly leaves
for the bathroom,
still feeling sick.
The toilet flushes one time and then again
and the pipes laugh sharply.
© Anders Enochsson 2009


12 Reflections:
Sounds like a monday morning, with the rawness of everything.
Skulle aldrig kunna klämma i mig sådant till frukost ens om jag hade varit köttätare. Blääää....
Riktigt bra dikt med flyt i. Men när man tittar på den där flottiga bilden känns ordet flyt fel. Rinner obehindrat kan man inte heller säga utan att associera till bilden. Äh, du fattar... Bra puls.
Very good imagery. You can capture emotion so well with your writing. I really liked this one. So univeral to almost every part of the planet.
Hej,
Fan jag tror jag ska steka en förpackning bacon. Styrbjörn är ett jäkligt snyggt namn tycker jag.
Bra dikt. Jag skulle aldrig ha på mig trasiga kalsonger. Aldrig. Inte ens om nån försökte tvinga mig till det. Med pistolen mot tinningen.
Ande,
Fascinating imagery. It sounds simultaneously like a kitchen, in the morning, with a interloping, naughty child, and a train station.
It's funny, and dramatic, but I don't know just how.
How could that be? I, again, don't know.
what a paradise !!
i meant it
ArtSparker - Yes Monday morning is usually not my favorite scene.
Jenny - Ja men ändrade nu. Kött blääää
Gray - Thank you. It's nice to hear that people from other pats of the world can relate to my poetry.
Jukka - Jag vet att du inne skulle det.
Andy - I didn't feel this poem was finished so I re wrote it. Perhaps this mysterious feeling came from this fact.
Caio - Thank you.
Reminds me of London. It seems the days around the winter equinox, one scrambles out of bed blearily trying to wake before the commuter hell of the tube. Thankfully I don't have to do that any more...
Oh, London is full of impression.
Dear Ande,
An astonishing piece. You
create isolation among others
so well. I admire you economy
of language.
Marie
Hi Mari,
Thank you. Your blog is a marvel of economy of language.
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